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"His Buddy, Optimus"


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I'm Baggie. I used to live by the dumpster behind that Fancy Italian Restaurant off the corner of Broadmore 'n' 33rd street. The kids called me Baggie 'cause I carried a worn out plastic bag with me ev'rywhere I went. Inside were trinkets I've had with me since I can remember.

There was a tarnished, golden ring inside, flat as the cracked sidewalk I lived on. I think I stepped on it once, but I still carried it in my bag. I think it belonged to my dad, if I had a dad. At least, I'd like to think it came from my dad, 'cause I don't remember.

There was also this red book with pages torn up 'n' stained so bad you couldn't tell what was on 'em. There's a faded picture of a white rabbit wearin' cloths on the cover of it. I can't read, but I still carried it in my bag. I liked to look at the pictures inside sometimes at night before I went to bed. I dunno why, but I always felt pretty darn happy after seein' some of the pictures of those silly rabbits.

I also had a broken robot toy. He could change into a red semi-truck. The red 'n' blue paint on 'im was flakin' off ev'rywhere. He looked more silver than red in all honesty. I think he's called Optimist, Optimust, Optimus? Somethin' like that. I heard from the other street kids he's a leader of a bunch of robots from another planet. I found 'im in a dumpster one day, as I was lookin' for some lunch. He's been my best friend ever since I found 'im. He's never inside my bag, 'cause what kind of friend keeps his best bud inside a dirty, plastic bag?

I always went to bed with Optimus, 'cause he's supposed to protect me from all the bad people on the streets at night. One time one of the local homeless guys wandered up to where we were sleepin'. He had a broken beer bottle in one hand as he was stumblin' 'bout, knockin' over ev'rythin' he could find. He was causin' quite a ruckus. His path of destruction woke me 'n' Optimist up. He managed to stumble up to us, 'n' outta the blue, he said he was gonna kill me. I scrambled away from 'im as fast as I could, but I ended up puttin' me 'n' Optimus in a corner. I was pretty scared at that point havin' nowhere to run off to. I think Optimust was too, but I can never tell with that mask of his. I think anyone would if they were in that situation, but I remembered Optimist was supposed save me whenever I got in a tight spot. I threw 'im at the craz'd guy 'n' he hit 'im right square on the nose! Gave 'im a nice nosebleed. The guy was so fuzzed in the head, he lost his balance 'n' smacked his head somethin' fierce on the pavement. I remember his head hittin' the ground, 'cause that crackin' sound still gives me nightmares ev'ry now 'n' then. That homeless guy didn't get up after he fell.

Me 'n' Optimus had to find a new place to live for a bit, 'cause there were cops ev'rywhere, prowlin' the alleys at night for 'bout a couple of weeks. Once they stopped appearin', me 'n' Optimust moved back to our corner by the dumpster.

I'm pretty thankful I had my best bud to watch my six all the time. He may not be the best 'bot for the job, but he tried his very best, 'n' I guess tryin' is better than not carin' at all... 'cause, well, not a whole lot of normal people cared 'bout us.

I knew no one cared 'bout us when no one came runnin' to help me 'n' Optimust when that semi hit us a couple of seconds ago.

I was bein' stupid again, 'n' crossed the road without lookin', 'cause I saw that balloon stand open up across the street. I found enough coins in the alleys the day before to pay for the blue balloon I wanted. I dunno why I bothered findin' the coins for the balloon, since Greg (the guy who hauls around the balloon cart. He's the one with the scruffy beard) always gave me the balloon I wanted for free. He was a nice guy... Anyways, I ran across the street hopin' to get that balloon before anyone else did, 'n' as I did, a big ol' semi slammed right into my left side. Optimus  saw the semi before I did, 'n' managed to wedge his way between me 'n' the front of it. He shattered into a billion little pieces on impact.

I did too.

Poor Optimust... my best bud protected me until the bitter end. That semi that hit us screeched to a stop not too long afterwards. I'm pretty sure I'm dead, since I'm standin' on the sidewalk I was on before I ran across the road. It's kind of a weird feelin'. I mean, it's weird seein' you splattered all over the road as you're still standin' around. I can't really describe how it feels. Let's just say it's "weird" to keep it simple.

Anyways, the semi stopped in the middle of the road. I don't know if I'm seein' things differently since I'm dead, but the darned thing is shiftin' shape. The semi -- the semi just stood up...? Wha--hey! He looks like my Optimus toy! No way! That's cool! Optimus really does exist!

What's he doin' now...? He's crouchin' down to me 'n' -- oh?  Oh.

Aw, shoot. He doesn't look too happy right now...

...He's just holdin' the dead me now.

Wait, I think he saw Optimus -- er, toy Optimus...

I think he picked up toy Optimus's head...?

Aw man... How freaky is that? The real Optimus just squished me 'n' my bud, Optimus.

Who'd thought that'd be the way we'd go?
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Edit: A DD?!??!???????!!!! WHAT??? This was a plesant surprise! THANK YOU `JZLobo and ^SingingFlames for this honor! =) and a thank YOU to all you wonderful people on the interwebs for loving this piece!!! =) AAAH!!! I'm so excited right now! :dance: 

I felt like writing after going through some rough times IRL and this just kind of... manifested. :S

Sorry about the punch to the childhood, but I've always been wondering if this sort of thing has happened to our beloved Autobot Leader? I mean, I can't tell you how many times I've almost been run over by car 'cause of some dumb thing like a soccer ball, or a frisbee. I've always wondered how Optimus would react to something like this... especially if HE was the one to run over some stupid kid. Heh, I guess I didn't really answer my own question, since I put this in the POV of Baggie.

I wanted to do something a little different for the Halloween instead of drawing. I hope y'all enjoy this (or at least send me some hate messages for doing this to Optimus :P). I wanted to see if I could write out a somewhat serious little one shot. XD It's a bit morbid, but hey! It fits the holiday season! :lmao:

Some things about the writing:
:bulletred: There was this massive park over where I used to live in MI called, Monroe Park... since it was off Monroe Street.
:bulletred: I just pulled Broadmore and 33rd St. out of my ass. I have no idea if there's some "fancy Italian restaurant" at the corner of those two roads. XD
:bulletred: Optimus is purposefully misspelled in this a couple of times because Baggie isn't too certain which word to use at times.
:bulletred: Baggie is a play off a character named "Ziplock" from Eoin Colfer's book "The Supernaturalist". I remember reading that book a looooong time ago, and loving it to pieces. I suck with coming up with names, so I decided to do a little shout out to that awesome book. I LIKE EOIN COLFER'S STUFF. DON'T HATE _SOBS_
:bulletred: Just so people are wondering, the toy Optimus Baggie finds -I- think is an original G1 toy. The one that's all metal, and heavy as crap? Yeah. That one. XD However, I left it up in the air for people to fill in with their imaginations which "Optimus" toy Baggie finds.
:bulletred: The flattened ring represents a broken promise parents gives to their kids to keep 'em "safe".
:bulletred: The book is a reference to Peter Cottontail, some children's story. :shrugs: I've never read it..... but I figured a famous kiddie tale would be easier for people to associate with. Hehe. (after googling what Peter Cottontail is, I am a terrible person for adding it in this sad little fic XD)
:bulletred: Also, I'm not religious, but it is interesting to think about what's on "the other side" after we kick the can or in this case get squished by Optimus.
:bulletred: Baggie could be boy. Baggie could be a girl. ;)

I'll probably delete this or put it in storage sometime later on... but meh, I'm just in a weird funk right now. :S

Comments and Critiques welcomed!

Transformers (c) Hasbro.
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Given 2013-11-02
His Buddy, Optimus by *afrolady114 A touching and brilliantly narrated story, with an unexpected ending. Also suggested by an anonymous deviant. ( Suggested by JZLobo and Featured by SingingFlames )
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milandare Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
I enjoyed this very much.
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AK-is-Superior Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahh, I remember Ziplock!! c:

*will never know if Baggie is a boy or girl*
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DalailamaNYF Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Student
Interesting, but stupid. Yawn 
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh that's ok. XD I thought it was stupid too when I wrote it too. :)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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BlakTideMaximum Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ech!I teared up at bit from the end. This is so sweet.
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Jazzninja545 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :) VEry well deserved! :clap:
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iDJPanda Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Student General Artist

Congrats on the well-deserved Daily Deviation! :la:

Have a good day! :love:

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holygreatgrandparome Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Please don't delete this D:
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Firon-of-Cybertron Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So sad....fav
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Downshifty Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
Good! I like the tone!
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Armentitron Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
Short 'n sweet. Very nice.
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing!
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Scarstar9 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I loved that...
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AquaGalaxy Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
congratulations on a DD for your awesome art! >w<
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DarkeAngel Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013   General Artist
very well written, very moving. a nice little one shot. congrats on the DD it, is well deserved. 
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on having your piece featured as one of today's Daily Deviations!

Very well deserved :glomp:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove: Have a nice day! :heart:
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS!!! =) :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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JZLobo Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn. That's... heartbreaking.
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:iconarwingpilot114:
ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes a little heartbreak is what we all need every now and then. =(

Thanks for the comment, sir! =) 
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JZLobo Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I guess so.
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:iconteiouja:
TeiOuja Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Aww...poor Baggie.
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:iconarwingpilot114:
ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed. :( And Little Optimust too. :C 

Thank you for the comment! ^^ 
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:iconteiouja:
TeiOuja Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
No worries. I feel sorry for Baggie, though. 
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:iconarwingpilot114:
ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed. :( 'Tis a sad tale... with sequels to come. ;) 
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:iconteiouja:
TeiOuja Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Or rather, prequels. Since Baggie's well...dead.
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, yes... good point. O.o;
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:iconteiouja:
TeiOuja Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I'd really like to know who his parents were.
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm... That would be an interesting development if people were to find out who Baggie's "real" parents were... frantically searches the interwebs for a clever tie in for Baggie's parents to the Transformers universe... :lol: 

I guess my question to you is who do you think are Baggie's parents were? :?
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trigirl48 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
What a sad ending. T_T I can't help but wonder what "real" Prime is thinking. Wonderfully written, I shall be sharing this with friends.
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know. :( I cried a bit while writing this ^^; 
Funny you should mention that... I'm in progress of writing that exact POV with Optimus, and little Optimust. :) 

Thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed this! ^^ :hug:
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DecepticonFlamewar Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:( 
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:iconarwingpilot114:
ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Words can do no justice to the scene that unraveled before Baggie, and the 2 Primes. :( 
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Jazzninja545 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
 Wow. Words cannot do justice here. This was phenomenally written. I loved how you made this so realistic and believable. Poor Baggie and poor Optimus! Er...well both optimus's actually. That's gotta be rough on the Prime knowing he accidentally hit someone and they were holding his toy on top of that. I would be interested in seeing Prime's POV in a spinoff....
Either way, I. Loved. This! Excellent job writing an excellent piece of literature! 
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
=^w^= aww, thank you so much for that!! :D 

Yes! I've always had this plot bunny in the back of my head - what would Prime do if he accidentally killed someone? :? 
Funny you should mention that - I'm in the process of writing a few spin off fics of this little incident. ^^ So your wish will come true! :D 

^^ Thanks again for the kind words! :hug: It's people like you who leave awesome comments give me the drive to continue a little idea like this! :) 
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FoxAircurrent Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
This is a very interesting take on meeting with Optimus. Very intriguing and I enjoyed reading very much. I imagine this was as much fun to write as it was to read. Brovo :clap:
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D :dance: Thank you so much for the kind words! :) I'm so happy you enjoyed this! 

Everyone can write an epic tale or draw an epic picture of Optimus, but has anyone really seen what he could be like at the opposite end of the spectrum? 
Accidents DO happen, and I would imagine something like what happened to Baggie could happen to Optimus... ya know? :) 

Thanks again~! 
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FoxAircurrent Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
I would imagine that too. X3

You're very welcome, you deserve it.
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^_^ :hug: 


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FoxAircurrent Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
:glomp:
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Also, did you get your icon from :iconkattling: ? XD It looks similar to mine! :D
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FoxAircurrent Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
Indeed I did, check my signature ^^
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:iconarwingpilot114:
ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome! That makes two of us! :) I love the Growlithe! So cute with the little flame. ^^ 
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LoveyouCry Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow....that was...interesting. amazing...but interesting
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ Thank you! I wanted to branch out of my comfort zone and try something new! :) Glad you all are kind of amazed and interested in this piece! ^^ 

It's fascinating to think about... if something like this has ever happened to Optimus... and what he would do afterwards?
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LoveyouCry Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it's funny, I was thinking about Armada Optimus while reading this and thought, "what f that was Rad?!?!"
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ArwingPilot114 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG. 

Dude, you just blew my mind! D: 

NOW I WANT TO CRY FOREVER IN A CORNER. I'M SUCH A TERRIBLE PERSON!! :iconcryforeverplz:
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LoveyouCry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no no no no!! don't do that!!! you make m and Startscream cry.....plz don't! Rad is ok!!! 
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